It had started out as a pretty warm day. We had just started to climb Mt Richardson with the school and apart from a few ups it had been really easy. Brooklyn,Haylley and I had been chatting away. Soon we were up to a steep part and we stopped talking. Unlucky this steep part went on and on and on. It was the kind of grinding steep part,when you almost have to pull your legs up. This went on for what seemed like an hour,but I probably was shorter than that.
Once we had got to the top of that hill we stopped for morning tea. Happily we flopped down and decided how much we were going to eat. The hardest part for me was trying not to eat all my food. Soon we had recharged our batteries and we were raring to go. I started to walk with Emma which was good because we talked a bit and we didn't really notice how fast time was passing by.
Soon I got to a part that I knew was close to the top. We grunted up the last bit and then before we knew it we were at a the very windy top of Mt Richardson. It was cold. The wind was howling around us and it almost seemed like it was going to pick us up and carry us down the mountain.
We found a spot out of the wind and put lots of clothes on. I ate everything,but I left some food for afterwards. After a long wait we were put in a line and we numbered off. I was in the back so when we set of I started to run to the front. It was quite a long way from the back to the front,but I did make it. I loved going down,because we had a good pace and we were all chatting away(and I didn't fall over).
Soon we were sprinting out of the track and rolling down the hill!!!!!
Great detail Anna. I like the description you have added so that the reader felt like they were there. The variation of sentence length also added to the impact of this piece of writing.
ReplyDeleteI had to read the first paragraph a couple of times to figure out the tense and am still unsure whether it was past or present?
It certainly was cold on top. I know that I enjoyed finding a sheltered place to sit down and eat my lunch, I was starving.
I will re-read the first paragraph and edit it. Thanks for the feedback I really appreciate it.
ReplyDeleteThanks Anna, I enjoyed reading your account of Mt Richardson. The thing I like about walking with friends is that you get to chat about 'stuff' and don't always notice how far you have hiked. I like that you have entertained us with good descriptive language about how you felt when you sat down to rest and eat and as well what it was like at the top.
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