At school for writing one of our focuses has been Pick a Path writing. This is when we wrote a story and the reader can pick the path of the storyline. I have focused on making it visually appealing so the page looks exciting.
Great job Anna very descriptive and all the pictures related to the writing. You picked a good topic to write about and it was very different to other people's topics. Good job.
Anna your story was so intense. You put heaps of detail in it and that made me think that was my mum dead and that was scary. From the time that you go to the woods and explain about you friends I think you need to allaborate on your feelings and more on the blood and maybe mum, so readers can understand the story line better. Apart from that your story was great.
Awesome Anna, I really like how you used lots of description and the images you used to back the story up. I loved the suspense in your story and how you managed to produce such a good book by yourself. I would defiantly recommend this book to 12-16 year olds as some of the words I had to look up to actually get the story. I really liked your intro slide as it was easier to follow. Next time maybe you could add a little more detail onto your slides. Overall it left you wanting more. where did you get the intro slide image from did you make them or get them of google?
great job i really liked how all your pictures related to the topic you had such great detail and your writting was very descriptive you i once i finished reading i then went through all the paths and wanted to read more.i liked how you described the characters with so much detail.When it come to the end i was exited for what was going to happen and then i seen to be continued.I really hope you write a part two and you really got me hooked.
Wow Anna this is definitely one of my favourite pick a paths so far. I really liked how you described the characters in the story with lots of descriped details. I also liked how you made the map at the start with all the friends houses and the woods. At the start I think you could of added a few more choices but other than that everything was really good. This story made me feel like it was my mum in the story and I was looking through Arias eyes which was quite scary. It was a real twist then I found out that Arias dad had killed her mum I didn't expect that to happen. Also where did you get the theme on slides they really related to the story. I think this story would be best for people over 12 years and over because younger kids would get quite scared. After reading this it made me curious for when the next story will be out.
Great job Anna very descriptive and all the pictures related to the writing. You picked a good topic to write about and it was very different to other people's topics. Good job.
ReplyDeleteAnna your story was so intense. You put heaps of detail in it and that made me think that was my mum dead and that was scary. From the time that you go to the woods and explain about you friends I think you need to allaborate on your feelings and more on the blood and maybe mum, so readers can understand the story line better. Apart from that your story was great.
ReplyDeleteAwesome Anna, I really like how you used lots of description and the images you used to back the story up. I loved the suspense in your story and how you managed to produce such a good book by yourself. I would defiantly recommend this book to 12-16 year olds as some of the words I had to look up to actually get the story. I really liked your intro slide as it was easier to follow. Next time maybe you could add a little more detail onto your slides. Overall it left you wanting more.
ReplyDeletewhere did you get the intro slide image from did you make them or get them of google?
great job i really liked how all your pictures related to the topic you had such great detail and your writting was very descriptive you i once i finished reading i then went through all the paths and wanted to read more.i liked how you described the characters with so much detail.When it come to the end i was exited for what was going to happen and then i seen to be continued.I really hope you write a part two and you really got me hooked.
ReplyDeleteWow Anna this is definitely one of my favourite pick a paths so far. I really liked how you described the characters in the story with lots of descriped details. I also liked how you made the map at the start with all the friends houses and the woods. At the start I think you could of added a few more choices but other than that everything was really good. This story made me feel like it was my mum in the story and I was looking through Arias eyes which was quite scary. It was a real twist then I found out that Arias dad had killed her mum I didn't expect that to happen. Also where did you get the theme on slides they really related to the story. I think this story would be best for people over 12 years and over because younger kids would get quite scared. After reading this it made me curious for when the next story will be out.
ReplyDeleteThanks Emma for the moment. I made all the slide images and it took me a long time!
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