Grand opening day

This is my piece of writing that we wrote about the book that we are reading(Juggling with mandarins). In the book there's a opening day of the new mega centre. Our topic we were given is Grand opening day. This is my writing:

Ever since that fight that one fight with that mean old man everything has changed.it's just like someone has come and tipped the world upside down making it change,probably forever and it is all that darn big dome shaped buildings fault. I know I probably sound stupid,mad even for a kid,but it all started when that silly old man invested thousands and thousands of dollars for a pretty big mega centre. At first I was excited like a horse getting sugar,but that sugar was snatched away and the paddock that the horse lived in was taken away. I was the horse. I was the one that lived in those old,ugly,derelict houses that got wiped out and turned into a big gym. I was the one that lived in those houses that no one cared about and when they knocked down our house no one spared a thought for those people and what gets me the most is why didn't anyone think,

"Where are these people going to live?".

I remember the day like Christmas, not in a good way though. It was the argueing,the shouting that woke me from my slumber. I remember the bulky man with the big shoulders shouting at my father and my father,my small,skinny, father shouting back"you can't take our house". Over all of this the one thing I remembered the most was the man ignoring my father's pleas,handing him a slip of paper and saying "Your house will be knocked down at two o'clock today, so you have four hours to get your most wanted possessions and get out".

I was so angry at that man,the man that started the fight,the man that gave the all clear to knock down OUR house. I was angry at the people that cheered when they knocked down the first house,the people who watched transfixed for the whole day and the people that left my poor,struggling family living under the bridge,but I didn't have to be angry anymore because I had a plan....

Anna